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Some people think that it is beneficial for students to go to private secondary schools, but others think that it has negative effects. Discuss both points of view and give your own oipnion

#people #students #schools #effects #points #oipnion
The is an
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ongoing
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 is better for high
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students
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 attending a
privet
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public
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 both viewpoints and offer my opinion. On the one hand, people who
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 with the private
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 that giving a larger budget could mean more resources for teachers to use in order for them to plan the lessons in
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affective
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 way,
moreover
 they can spend more on the material that they need to use during each lesson.
for example
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teachers
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on
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privet
schools
 can use more
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 during
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labratory
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laboratory
 lesson because the
school
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 for them . yet On another hand, people who are
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against
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 that students who move to
privet
schools
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a student
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student
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students
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 from
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specific
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 of the
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society
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without
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 any chance for personal growth .
In addition
, they will only make friends with children
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mutual
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 meaning they will avoid knowing children from other social
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classes
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 showing no
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consideration
to
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 other children .
For instance
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students
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 from rich families would prefer to become
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friends
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students
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 who are actually rich, ignoring the other
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students
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 who might be from poorer
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communities
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. In conclusion,
Although
 some people support the idea that moving
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teenage
 students to a
privet
school
 would benefit them as
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 has a bigger budget that can help the teachers allocate more
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to
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lesson
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 resources. I strongly agree with the other group that
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 would only downsize
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