The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
A glance at the given map depicts different areas in Garlsdon. The new
supermarket
will be constructed in the mentioned town. The highlighted map demonstrates two suggested sites for this
city.
Firstly
, the proposed location of the supermarket
is in the center
of the Town Centre. Change the spelling
centre
In addition
, this
place is beside the Railway and has appropriate accessibility for public transportation, and the advantage of this
area is that it does not have a traffic zone. Surrounding this
supermarket
is a large industrial zone. The offered location is considerably far from the two housing zones.
As shown in the figure, the second planned location for the supermarket
is in the Countryside. Although
this
place is situated on the outskirts of the city, it is near Main
roads and the Railway.
Correct article usage
the Main
This
site has a 12 km distance to Hindon with a population of ten tousands
. It can be seen Correct your spelling
thousands
thousand
that is
neither near to the industrial zone nor the housing zones.Submitted by speher2000behroozifar on
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