The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph presents
the
information Correct article usage
apply
of
the participation numbers of individuals involved in various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020. Change preposition
on
Overall
, there are 5 different activities presented in Linking Words
this
chart, the Linking Words
film
Use synonyms
club
has the highest proportion of participants, Use synonyms
while
others do not have the same popularity.
In 2000, Linking Words
Use synonyms
film
Correct article usage
the film
club
was the most popular activity with 65%, the least Use synonyms
percent
point was 0% of participants Replace the word
percentage
of
musical Change preposition
in
perfomances
. Correct your spelling
performances
Linking Words
Also
almost the same percentage was allocated to amateur dramatics and martial arts 25% and 35% respectively, Add a comma
Also,
meanwhile
table tennis had only 15% of all participants.
After 20 years Add a comma
meanwhile,
period
the situation was changed. Add a comma
period,
Film
Use synonyms
club
shows stability, Use synonyms
saves
65% after 20 years, another category that remained unchanged was martial arts with 35%. Since 2000 the popularity of table tennis Wrong verb form
saving
rose
gradually and Wrong verb form
has risen
reach
a peak equal to half of all respondents. Wrong verb form
reached
However
amateur dramatics popularity Linking Words
decline
steadily from 25% to 5%, meanwhile musical Wrong verb form
declined
perfomances
had a significant increase from 0% to almost 15%.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
performances
film
Use synonyms
club
was the most popular type of activity in Melbourne between 2000 and 2020, it is impossible to surpass Use synonyms
this
sphere, because of Linking Words
small
percentages of other categories.Correct article usage
the small
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words film, club with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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