The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph presents
the
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information
of
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on
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the participation numbers of individuals involved in various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
, there are 5 different activities presented in
this
chart, the
film
club
has the highest proportion of participants,
while
others do not have the same popularity. In 2000,
film
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the film
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club
was the most popular activity with 65%, the least
percent
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point was 0% of participants
of
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in
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musical
perfomances
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performances
.
Also
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almost the same percentage was allocated to amateur dramatics and martial arts 25% and 35% respectively,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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table tennis had only 15% of all participants. After 20 years
period
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period,
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the situation was changed.
Film
club
shows stability,
saves
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65% after 20 years, another category that remained unchanged was martial arts with 35%. Since 2000 the popularity of table tennis
rose
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gradually and
reach
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reached
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a peak equal to half of all respondents.
However
amateur dramatics popularity
decline
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declined
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steadily from 25% to 5%, meanwhile musical
perfomances
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performances
had a significant increase from 0% to almost 15%. In conclusion,
film
club
was the most popular type of activity in Melbourne between 2000 and 2020, it is impossible to surpass
this
sphere, because of
small
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the small
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percentages of other categories.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words film, club with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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