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The internet has brought about many changes into our day to day life. Nowadays we are doing things such as mailing, communication much faster. Do these developments have more advantages than disadvantages?

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The
internet
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 has introduced numerous
changes
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 to our daily
lives
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, allowing us to perform
tasks
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 like sending emails and communicating at a much faster pace today.
While
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 there are some drawbacks,
such
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 as digital addiction and privacy concerns, I believe the main benefits,
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, convenience in daily
tasks
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 and educational
opportunities
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, are more substantial.  On the one hand, a potential disadvantage of the
internet
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 has brought about many
changes
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 in our day-to-day
lives
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. Nowadays, we are doing things
such
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 as mailing, and communicating much faster, and we have privacy concerns, as personal data can be easily tracked, collected, and misused by third parties. Another perceived negative is digital addiction, the widespread availability of the
internet
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 has contributed to digital addiction, as many people find themselves spending excessive amounts of time online, often at the expense of their productivity and well-being. •
On the other hand
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, a primary advantage of the
internet
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 has introduced numerous
changes
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 to our daily
lives
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, allowing us to perform
tasks
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 like sending emails and communicating at a much faster pace today that convenience in daily
tasks
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,
such
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 as online banking, shopping, and booking services have made daily
tasks
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 more convenient and time-efficient. A
further
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 benefit is educational
opportunities
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, online courses and educational resources provide more
opportunities
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 for learning and professional development. • On balance, it is true that the
internet
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 has brought about many
changes
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 in our day-to-day
lives
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. Nowadays, we are doing things
such
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 as mailing and communicating much faster, which seem disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
However
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, in my view, its positive effects in terms of having convenience in daily
tasks
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 and educational
opportunities
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 override the disadvantages.

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You have provided a clear introduction and a well-rounded conclusion. This helps in clearly presenting the main argument and summarizing your points effectively.
response
Your essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of the topic, providing a balanced viewpoint which is good for task achievement.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant messaging
  • video calls
  • virtual meetings
  • access to information
  • online banking
  • e-commerce
  • educational resources
  • digital addiction
  • privacy concerns
  • digital divide
  • social media platforms
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • cybersecurity
  • streaming services
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