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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge. and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Studying abroad has become a more and more popular trend
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 university students these days. Do the advantages outweigh the drawbacks? The debate seems controversial. On the one hand, it cannot be denied that moving to another country for your degree is more expensive than staying in your own country.
For instance
, take into account rent costs and the electricity bills that would
otherwise
 be paid by your parents whilst still living in your childhood home.
Moreover
, leaving your friends and family behind is heartbreaking.
However
,
on the other hand
, attending university abroad is an exceptional occasion to get to know a new culture and new traditions
as well as
 to learn a new language.
Moreover
, it gives you the chance to make friends with people from all over the world,
thus
 enhancing your social skills. It is
also
 worth considering that going out of your comfort zone allows you to mature and
to
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become more
indipendent
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independent
,
thus
 boosting your self-esteem. In fact, since they cannot rely on their parents for
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household
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 or everyday life errands, students learn to properly take care of themselves and the place where they live.
Additionally
, being an international student increases the chances of getting a competitive job offer in the future, as it is widely known that companies value experiences in a foreign country highly when sorting through job applications.
To sum up
,
although
 it is acceptable to think
otherwise
, in my view, students should not miss out on the opportunity
of studying
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 abroad, even for a brief period of time.
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task achievement
Make sure to expand on your points with more specific examples and evidence. This will help deepen your argument and make it more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Try to elaborate a bit more on both the introduction and conclusion to give a stronger framework to your essay. This will make your arguments more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical flow and structure, making it very readable and easy to follow.
task achievement
You have presented your ideas clearly and comprehensively, addressing both the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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