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You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter -remind your employer what the course was about -explain why the course was useful to you in your work -suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues Begin your letter as follows: Dear ,

Dear Mr. Smith, Thank you for letting me attend a training
course
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 called Management of Deteriorated Patients
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 week. I am writing
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 letter as my feedback on that
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. That
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 was about how to manage patients in our hospital who are deteriorating and how to identify the early symptoms of deterioration. It was very helpful for me as a nurse because the explanation was detailed and easy to understand. Thanks to
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, I am now more confident that I can assess patients systematically.
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, I noticed that some of my colleagues seemed to be a little confused. These people are
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new graduate
 nurses or physiotherapists who are not so familiar with medical terminologies.
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such
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 acute settings yet, which is why it might have been difficult to imagine the situations that were given as examples.
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, it would be more suitable for medical staff that have a couple of years of experience in acute settings. I hope
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 feedback will be useful for you. Yours faithfully, Hiromi Okumura

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You might consider offering specific examples of what you learned or how you are implementing new skills in your work to further strengthen your feedback.
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You could elaborate more on why the course content was difficult for less experienced staff by emphasizing specific challenging aspects.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with clear paragraphs for each point, making it easy to follow your thoughts.
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You have included all required points - reminding your employer about the course, explaining its usefulness, and suggesting why it may not be suitable for some colleagues.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • “I am writing to provide feedback on…”
  • “The training course titled ‘(Course Name)’…”
  • “The main objectives of the course included…”
  • “One of the significant techniques/methodologies covered was…”
  • “This course has been particularly useful for me because…”
  • “I have already started implementing…”
  • “As a result of the training, I have noticed improvements in…”
  • “However, I believe this course may not be suitable for all colleagues because…”
  • “Some roles do not require…”
  • “The course assumes a level of expertise in…”
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