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Band 7.5

You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to take time off work give details of the amount of time you need suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

Dear Mr. Mike, Yesterday I received an invitation from New Age Management to give a
presentation
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 on marketing techniques and I would like to ask you for a
day
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 off
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 to make
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presentation
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, which is scheduled for next Friday.
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 my
presentation
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 would not
last
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 all
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, I think I should be there for the whole
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 in order to have the opportunity to meet attendees. I have checked with my team and they are confident that they can cover my
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 for that
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, especially as we are well ahead with the Ace Corporation project. Maggie can deal with my calls and any urgent emails whilst Barry is totally familiar with the ongoing project
work
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. I am sure you will agree that making a
presentation
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 for New Age will raise our profile and is likely to bring us extra
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, so I hope that you will agree to give me the
day
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 off. Best regards, David Onta

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a single idea for better clarity.
task achievement
Consider adding a closing statement to reinforce your request.
task achievement
The letter explains clearly why time off is needed.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your letter is generally clear and logical.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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