IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar graph illustrates the amounts of
air
Use synonyms
pollution
Use synonyms
 in four different countries;
China
Use synonyms
, America, Japan, and Australia, in the year 2012.
Overall
Linking Words
,
China
Use synonyms
 was the country that produced the most
air
Use synonyms
pollution
Use synonyms
 in the three sectors; electricity generation, transport, and industry. The
air
Use synonyms
pollution
Use synonyms
 level of the electricity sector was 15
PPM
Use synonyms
 in Japan,
while
Linking Words
 in America, it reached a double level,
however
Linking Words
, it was four times that amount in
China
Use synonyms
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the
air
Use synonyms
pollution
Use synonyms
 in all three sectors in Australia had almost the same level; less than 20
PPM
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
, the industry sector, in comparison with the other sectors, had the highest amount of
air
Use synonyms
pollution
Use synonyms
 in both
China
Use synonyms
 and Japan; 80
PPM
Use synonyms
 and 42
PPM
Use synonyms
 respectively.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, transport was the highest sector producing
air
Use synonyms
pollution
Use synonyms
 in America, with about 60
PPM
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, on the other hand".
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, china, ppm with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollution levels
  • sources of pollution
  • industrial pollution
  • transportation-related pollution
  • household pollution
  • highest levels
  • lowest levels
  • notable changes
  • anomalies
  • comparisons
  • summarise
  • highlight
  • analyze
  • chart
  • data
What to do next:
Look at other essays: