Today people are using the things and throwing or replacing it with latest models or latest fashion. Do the advantages of throwing away society outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent times
people
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attracted
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the development of the world. It is a highly debatable issue whether
people
are
followed
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with latest
models
, or whether they maintain their simple life. I think that the beneficial effects of
latest
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fashion overpower the detrimental ones.
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essay will outline the merits and demerits. On the one hand,replacing traditional fashion
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with
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the latest one
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a
sigificant
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significant
risk on
socoity's
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society's
value. Many
people
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forgeted
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forget
forged
their culture.
For example
, my friend Fatma who traveled abroad
change
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her clothes into the latest
models
.
Moreover
, if
people
are exaggerating in buying
latest
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models
, they will
definitly
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definitely
forced
them
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to pay more money.To illustrate, the result of conducted research at Glasgow University illustrates that the prices of
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fashion
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more expensive than traditional ones.
Thus
, it
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as wasting
people
's money.
On the other hand
, technology plays
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role in
development
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the development
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of new devices.
People
tend to have
latest
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phone or
labtop
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laptop
to facilitate their lives.
For instance
, my brother
change
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his
labtop
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laptop
to have
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new version that helps him in his work.
Furthermore
, a lot of
people
feel that the
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to new
models
may make them more happy.
This
can
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them to reduce stress and depression. A good example here is food. There are various
type
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types
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of international food which
people
like it so much. In conclusion, the traditional fashions are inconsequential.
Therefore
,
it is clear that
the idea of following
latest
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the latest
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models
can change
people
's lives
positivily
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positively
positivity
. After
thorough
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analysis
on
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this
, it is predicted that
latest
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the latest
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fashions will be greater than the negative effects.
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language
Improve sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity. Some sentences are difficult to understand due to grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example: 'it is a highly debatable issue whether people are followed with latest models, or whether they maintain their simple life.' Rewriting it more clearly would help.
content
While you have presented both sides of the argument, the essay could benefit from more balanced development of points. The disadvantages of a 'throwaway society' need more depth and exploration.
language
Use more diverse vocabulary to avoid repetition and make your argument more compelling. Terms like 'latest models' and 'traditional ones' are repeated often.
content
The essay presents both advantages and disadvantages, showing a good attempt at balanced argumentation.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a clear beginning and end to the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • economic growth
  • environmental impact
  • resource depletion
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • technological advancement
  • quality of life
  • social status
  • societal pressure
  • financial stress
  • social inequality
  • sustainability
  • responsible consumption
  • recycling
  • upcycling
  • second-hand
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