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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#threats #environment
These days
because of
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global warming become one of the
most
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 threats to our society. Global warming is increasing earth temperatures
due to
 air pollution and cause to climate change.in
this
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 I will write about
main
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the main
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 reasons
of
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 global warming and
then
 I discuss
about
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solutions
about
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this
 issue. Many reasons will occur and spread global warming, one of the main reasons
of
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this
 problem Is cutting down trees and destroying natural habitats and forests to construct roads and buildings
due to
 population growth. Burning fossil fuels
also
 can be a main reason,
although
 these years some advanced governments and engineers
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 to solve
this
 issue
with
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 using
of
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renewable energy
however
 third world countries are using fossil fuels for their
vehicle
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vehicles
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 and factories.
Last
 but not least is using more electrical
device
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devices
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 than past.
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,
turn
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 on too
much
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 lights in houses and using
TV
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 or computer when they are in charge can cause
the
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global warming. As I mentioned before
It is clear that
 if governments use renewable energy
instead
 of fossil fuels
for example
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 using wind turbines and solar
panel
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panels
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 can assist
to solve
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this
 problem. Next
government
 and people should cooperate to save wildlife and forests by managing
it
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.
For instance
,
government
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 should avoid
from
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cutting trees and
plant
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planting
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 more.
Finally
human
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humans
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 should try to use public transportation
instead
 of using
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their own
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car
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furthermore
government
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the government
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also
 need to buy and provide
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an electrical
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electrical
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 to
avoiding from
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 air pollution and global warming
To sum up
 we can say
this
 is a
cooperate
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 work and people accommodating with
government
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the government
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 should solve
this
 issue together and hand by hand. I hope in the future wisdom of
next
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 generation will help to
stopping
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this
 chaos and unravel
this
 main and important problem.
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Introduction
Try to ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the main points you will discuss. While you did mention what will be covered, the wording could be clearer. Additionally, ensure that each body paragraph sticks to one main idea to avoid confusion.
Transition Words
To improve coherence and cohesion, use more linking words and phrases to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, words like 'Moreover,' 'Additionally,' and 'Consequently' can help keep your writing fluid and easier to read.
Examples
Provide more specific examples to back up your points. For instance, mentioning specific countries or regions where renewable energy has been successful, or statistical data on deforestation rates, would add more depth to your essay.
Word Choice
Avoid generalizations and be careful with wording. For instance, instead of 'human should try to use public transportation,' you can say, 'individuals should be encouraged to use public transportation more frequently.'
Grammar
Review your grammar and punctuation. There are several minor errors that could be easily fixed with a careful proofread. For example, 'global warming is increasing earth temperatures' should be 'global warming is increasing Earth's temperatures.'
Content
The essay addressed both causes and solutions to global warming, showing a good grasp of the topic.
Structure
You showed a willingness to discuss multiple points and provided a logical structure overall.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Climate change
  • Earth's atmosphere
  • Carbon dioxide
  • Methane
  • Nitrous oxide
  • Emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy efficiency
  • Afforestation
  • Carbon footprint
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