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The two maps below show an island both before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island both before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the transformation of an
island
 before and after
construction
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the construction
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 of several tourist
facilities
.
Initially
, the
island
 was a natural, undeveloped land mass surrounded by sea with a beach on the western side. The
area
 was covered with
palm-trees
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palm trees
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 and lacked any infrastructured or man-made
structure
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structures
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. The
100 meters
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100-meter
island
 indicated a pristine environment untouched by human activity. After the construction
,
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of, man-made
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man-made
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the man-made
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 structure was introduced, the
island
 went through a significant development to accommodate tourists. A range of
facilities
were
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was
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 built, including the
reception
area
 located in the
center
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centre
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 of the
island
, with a restaurant
in
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on
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 the north side of the
reception
area
. To the west and east of the
reception
area
, there are several accommodation units erected, with footpaths connecting the bungalows towards each other. A vehicle track was
also
 built connecting the restaurant,
reception
area
, and the pier in the south all together. The pier
also
 allows access on boats, increasing transportation options.
Additionally
, the beach on the western side of the
island
 was developed into a designated swimming
area
. Enhancing the
island
’s appeal to tourists. The
overall
 layout shows a well-planned structure of
facilities
while
 still maintaining some natural features like the palm trees. In conclusion, the development has transformed the vacant
island
 into a tourist destination with lots of
facilities
,
while
 keeping the natural features.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, facilities, area, reception with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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