The map below shows the development of the museum between 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map above depicts information about some changes

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the museum from 2010 to 2013.

This

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illustrates

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the changes in three parts, like left, centre, and right of the garden.

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it can be seen that there were several new facilities, repositioned, and removed places.

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in 2010, on the left side, there were

mammals

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and dinosaurs places in

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mammals

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on the south.

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, in the centre, there

were

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ocean

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an ocean

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hall and lobby. Not only that

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but

also

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people can find the entrance gate and ticket desk

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there. The right side was full of trees.

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, in 2013,

mammals

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was

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relocated to opposite.

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, the place

become

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an area for ice age and insects on the corner.

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, dinosaurs still remain

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its

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position.

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, there was

not

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improvement or refurbishment, in the centre. Everything

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still

remain

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remains

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the same

places

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place

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that, there were

cafe

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a cafe

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shop

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, and human origins display

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mammals

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on the right side.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words mammals with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

164 words

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The map below shows the development of the museum between 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

many people use distance-learning programs (study materials, the internet, and so on) to study at home, but some think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending school, college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people think the news has no connection to people's lives, so then it is a waste of time to read the news in the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree