The map below shows the development of the museum between 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map above depicts information about some changes
of
the museum from 2010 to 2013. Change preposition
in
This
essay will illustrates
the changes in three parts, like left, centre, and right of the garden. Change the verb form
illustrate
Overall
it can be seen that there were several new facilities, repositioned, and removed places.
First,
in 2010, on the left side, there were mammals
and dinosaurs places in which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
mammals
on the south. Moreover
, in the centre, there were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
ocean
hall and lobby. Not only thatCorrect article usage
an ocean
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
people can find the entrance gate and ticket desk at
there. The right side was full of trees.
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apply
In addition
, in 2013, mammals
was
relocated to opposite. Change the verb form
were
Furthermore
, the place become
an area for ice age and insects on the corner. Change the verb form
becomes
However
, dinosaurs still remain on
Change preposition
in
its
position. Correct pronoun usage
their
Additionally
, there was not
improvement or refurbishment, in the centre. Everything Correct your spelling
no
is
still Unnecessary verb
apply
remain
Correct subject-verb agreement
remains
on
the same Change preposition
in
places
. Fix the agreement mistake
place
Besides
that, there were cafe
, Add an article
a cafe
shop
, and human origins display Fix the agreement mistake
shops
along with
mammals
on the right side.Submitted by wishmeluck on
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mammals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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