The map below shows the development of the museum between 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the museum between 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map above depicts information about some changes
of
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the museum from 2010 to 2013.
This
essay will
illustrates
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the changes in three parts, like left, centre, and right of the garden.
Overall
it can be seen that there were several new facilities, repositioned, and removed places.
First,
in 2010, on the left side, there were
mammals
and dinosaurs places in
which
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mammals
on the south.
Moreover
, in the centre, there
were
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ocean
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hall and lobby. Not only that
,
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but
also
people can find the entrance gate and ticket desk
at
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there. The right side was full of trees.
In addition
, in 2013,
mammals
was
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relocated to opposite.
Furthermore
, the place
become
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an area for ice age and insects on the corner.
However
, dinosaurs still remain
on
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its
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position.
Additionally
, there was
not
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improvement or refurbishment, in the centre. Everything
is
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still
remain
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on
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the same
places
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.
Besides
that, there were
cafe
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,
shop
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, and human origins display
along with
mammals
on the right side.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mammals with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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