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The table gives information about leo's journey over 21 years from 2003 to 2024

The table gives information about leo's journey over 21 years from 2003 to 2024
The provided table illustrates
about
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the complexity of
Leo
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 journeys throughout the period of 21 years
started
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 from 2003 until 2024. In general,
the
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early childhood education underwent the easiest
whereas
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 the most difficult achievement was working as
builder
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.
To begin
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kindergarden
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kindergarten
 in 2003, primary academy (2003 to 2009), and intermediate school (2009 until 2012) were the bottom three of the most challenging to achieve at approximately one in ten, a quarter, and around a
third,
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, senior high school between 2012 and 2015, and undergraduate degree over 4
years
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 period from 2015 to 2019 witnessed the middle
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the
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difficulty level
which
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 the senior high school level
showed
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around
a
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half and the bachelor's degree
experienced
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 about
two-third
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two-thirds
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On the other hand
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,
worked
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 as an Engineer in the field area was more complicated than
other level
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another level
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 of difficulties
at
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 three quarters and happened
in
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 2019 to 2023.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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