The graph below shows the results of a survey among online adults on their use of various social media in the USA between 2012 and 2015.

The graph below shows the results of a survey among online adults on their use of various social media in the USA between 2012 and 2015.
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The figure gives information about the usage of 5 different social media applications (Facebook, Pinterest, Instagram, LinkedIn, and Twitter) in the USA between the years 2012 and 2015.
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had the highest percentage of usage in 4 years, and there
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a massive gap between the other websites. The other four applications were used by almost the same amount of people. Facebook had the first place with 67% of the users in 2012. It increased its share
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5% to 72% in 2013
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and continued with that ratio steadily until 2015. LinkedIn fluctuated in 3 years, and declined to 25% in 2015, after increasing almost 30% in 2014. Except for Facebook, LinkedIn had the most of the users with 20% in 2012. The people who
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proportion of 16% and 15% respectively in 2012. Twitter increased its users only to 23%, whilst Instagram and Pinterest had a massive attack and reached 28% and 31% respectively. All the percentages for five various apps rose in a particular way from 2012 to 2015.
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