Government should spend money on railways rather than roads To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statment?

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neither
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because it does not waste a huge amount of
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people
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the
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people
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long shopping because they spend a lot of their
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which will be more regarding.
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necessity
in miscellaneous products and goods that they needed in past when most
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families
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the families
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lived in houses which demanded more spendings.
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that
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to rent and other needs.
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has
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changed.
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they
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market apps that cut the
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could
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more properly to be better than others in comparison with the old times when the world was much
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less populated and was less
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aggressive
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could show us more opportunities and
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develop ourselves
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