Task 1 The bar chart shows the highest qualification attained by sex for the working age population in wales in 2001/2002 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant. The bar chart shows the highest qualification attained by sex for the working age population in wales in 2001/2002 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.
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The diagram provides information about the highest level of education that has been obtained by the
working age
population by gender in Wales during 2001/2002.
Add a hyphen
working-age
Overall
, it can be seen that majority
of the women Correct article usage
the majority
has
obtained Change the verb form
have
grade
A-C in GCSE or equivalent Fix the agreement mistake
grades
whereas
, majority
of the male population has passed GCE A level or equivalent. Correct article usage
the majority
On the other hand
, there are considerable
amount of female and male percentages with no qualifications at all.
People with a degree or higher education are considerably low compared to other categories regardless of gender with both proportions being less than 15% and less than 10% respectively.
Even though Add an article
a considerable
that
more men have passed educational exams, still there is Correct determiner usage
apply
striking
proportion of people with no education at all in Wales back in 2001/2002 with a percentage of 20%.
Correct article usage
a striking
Overall
, more women of the population are GCSE qualified and more men of the citizens are GCE A level passed while
more than 10% from both gender
are graduates.Change to a plural noun
genders
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