Task 1 The bar chart shows the highest qualification attained by sex for the working age population in wales in 2001/2002 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant. The bar chart shows the highest qualification attained by sex for the working age population in wales in 2001/2002 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.

Task 1

The bar chart shows the highest qualification attained by sex for the working age population in wales in 2001/2002

summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.

The bar chart shows the highest qualification attained by sex for the working age population in wales in 2001/2002

summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.
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The diagram provides information about the highest level of education that has been obtained by the
working age
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population by gender in Wales during 2001/2002.
Overall
, it can be seen that
majority
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the majority
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of the women
has
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have
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obtained
grade
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grades
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A-C in GCSE or equivalent
whereas
,
majority
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the majority
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of the male population has passed GCE A level or equivalent.
On the other hand
, there are
considerable
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amount of female and male percentages with no qualifications at all. People with a degree or higher education are considerably low compared to other categories regardless of gender with both proportions being less than 15% and less than 10% respectively. Even though
that
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apply
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more men have passed educational exams, still there is
striking
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proportion of people with no education at all in Wales back in 2001/2002 with a percentage of 20%.
Overall
, more women of the population are GCSE qualified and more men of the citizens are GCE A level passed
while
more than 10% from both
gender
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are graduates.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • qualification
  • attained
  • working age population
  • distribution
  • proportion
  • highly qualified
  • noticeable trends
  • patterns
  • significant
  • data
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