In many countries today,the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generation.some people say this have had a negative effect on their health.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is true that every generation has their own eating habit and
life style
which are different from their parents.Since every day there are snacks or cuisine being created or made making Correct your spelling
lifestyle
children
Use synonyms
attract
towards it.I agree that Wrong verb form
attracted
todays
Change to a genitive case
today's
children
are having health Use synonyms
issue
from having unhealthy Fix the agreement mistake
issues
food
Use synonyms
for example
junk Linking Words
food
,street Use synonyms
food
etc.
As per the statement before Use synonyms
generation
there were not Add a comma
generation,
much
snacks available for everyone and every household used to cook Change the quantifier
many
food
at home making Use synonyms
children
being given nutritions but as Use synonyms
now a days
Correct the word
nowadays
children
are being attracted to out street Use synonyms
food
which Use synonyms
are
made at Change the verb form
is
public
not being Add an article
the public
hygenic
but people still eat Correct your spelling
hygienic
such
things since it has good in taste.It is still a major problem that Linking Words
children
are not supervised by adults because they are busy and Use synonyms
tends
to send oily or Correct subject-verb agreement
tend
deep fried
Add a hyphen
deep-fried
food
from Use synonyms
young
age.Everyone can understand that sometimes they are busy and Add an article
a young
tends
to do it but Correct subject-verb agreement
tend
children
will get constant attraction towards it.
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On the other hand
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today
generation Change noun form
today's
there
can be said that every Correct pronoun usage
it
food
production organization are trying to sell Use synonyms
their item
by different Fix the agreement mistake
its items
method
Fix the agreement mistake
methods
for example
ads,social media,Linking Words
poster
etc.Everyone Fix the agreement mistake
posters
are
constantly being fooled by showing Change the verb form
is
its
good for Correct your spelling
it's
health
of Add an article
the health
children
but later it is found to be Use synonyms
poisonus
but Correct your spelling
poisonous
such
news Linking Words
are
pressed and Change the verb form
is
forgetten
in Correct your spelling
forgotten
short
time.Add an article
a short
such
things are being done in every part of the world Linking Words
therefore
people Linking Words
needs
to extra Change the verb form
need
precaution
Fix the agreement mistake
precautions
while
choosing Linking Words
food
for either Use synonyms
children
or elders.
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To conclude
Linking Words
i
agree that mostly it has had Change the capitalization
I
negative
effect on Add an article
a negative
children
so there should be Use synonyms
further
checking of packaged Linking Words
food
for Use synonyms
safety
of people.Correct article usage
the safety
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