the continued rise in the worlds population is greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. what are causes of this continued rise? do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

Latest statistics indicate that the
number
of people living on
earth
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is around seven billion.
This
number
is growing in a continuous fashion, caused by multiple reasons which form the most difficult
problem
that a human faced ever.
This
essay will discuss the causes and consequences of
this
huge
problem
. There are several factors that lead to the
premanent
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permanent
increase
in
population
.
for instance
, the
extending
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of a human
life-time
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lifetime
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which
led
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by
the
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medical development. Another reason is the decrease in the death rate
as a result
of
reducing
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in the
number
of wars.
furthermore
, rise in the average
number
of
birth
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births
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especially in third-world countries where each family have at least eight children. The infinite
increase
in the world's
population
is considered a real
Problem
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problem
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due to
it's
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its
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painful consequences.
For example
, an enormous
increase
in the government expenditure to satisfy the public needs.
Therefore
,
increase
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increases
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the pressure on
government
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the government
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to provide other resources of revenues to refund to public requirements, because every human has essential rights.
For instance
,
safe
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home, clean food and
good
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education. In fact, the growing
number
of people on earth
have
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indescribable
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an indescribable
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impact on
enviromental
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environmental
pollution and caused
a
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huge waste.
In addition
,
rise
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in
population
produced
crowded
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city and
create
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the
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traffic
problem
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problems
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. In conclusion,
this
issue has a lot of drawbacks,
on
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both
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government,
environment
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the environment
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and even
on
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people themselves. In my opinion,
this
problem
should be solved
through
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by
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limiting the growth rate in
population
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the population
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because I can see that it is the greatest
problem
that humanity
have
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to cope with.
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grammar
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coherence
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task response
The essay addresses both causes and consequences of the rise in global population.
structure
Clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
content
The essay recognizes the significance of government expenditure and environmental impact as key consequences.

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