School uniforms should be made compulsory in all schools. Do you agree or disagree?
It is inevitable thought that
schools
must make it compulsory for students
to wear school
attire. This
essay believes that although
school
outfits create an essence of equality among children, its negative aspects like burden
on parents to buy a new uniform cannot be neglected.
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the burden
School
clothing, which are
worn by Change the verb form
is
students
everyday
at Replace the word
every day
school
brings equality,
because Remove the comma
apply
school
is a place where students
from different cultures, communities and ages are learned
together without facing any discrimination on Wrong verb form
learn
Correct article usage
the prospective
prospective
of clothing. Correct your spelling
perspective
This
makes students
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students'
student's
life
happy, regardless Fix the agreement mistake
lives
focusing
on appearance, maintaining a good balance between an academic score and personal life, thereby Change preposition
of focusing
enhances
quality Wrong verb form
enhancing
life
. Change preposition
of life
For example
, in India, it is found that a gap of social status is reduced in all schools
as students
are more focused on studies,
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apply
while
comparing each other in terms of fashion.
However
, school
dress creates burden
on parent's shoulders. The reason is that all Add an article
a burden
schools
have different policies, such
as different uniforms
on different week days
, which not only creates stress on parent's mindsCorrect your spelling
weekdays
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
financially expensive. Add a missing verb
is also
For instance
, the
most parents in southern Africa cannot be able to afford one set of Correct article usage
apply
uniforms
to
their children because of monetary Change preposition
for
problem
. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
This
essay, therefore
, argues that, because of usage
of different sets of Correct article usage
the usage
uniforms
in one week, schools
’ uniforms
should not be made compulsory in all schools
.
In conclusion, for students
to bring equality among themselves, although
they can be benefitted
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benefit
by
wearing Change preposition
from
school
uniforms
, this
essay believes that both positive and negative aspects of making schools uniform
mandatory cannot be ignored.Fix the agreement mistake
school uniforms
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unique point
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