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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter: • suggest how you could help her in her home • say why you would like to do this work • explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barret, I am writing with reference to your advertisement looking for a house helper for a few hour's assistance in the upcoming summer. To commence with, I can help you with sweeping, vacuuming carpets, cleaning utensils, lawn mowing, and watering plants. I got practical experience as I was doing household chores
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 studying abroad. Let me explain my situation in more detail, I have been working 15 hours a day as a full-time freelancer and suffering from mental health. My doctor recommends, that I take a break from my work and limit my screen time which is why I am planning for the summer holidays.
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, indulging in physical activities will be beneficial for my mental and physical well-being. I would like to mention that I will be available from Monday to Friday from 9 to 5 PM.
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, I will be not available at night and at weekends. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Haris Khan
Submitted by Haris Khan on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly addresses a different aspect of the task given. Your letter does a good job overall, but try to make the transition between paragraphs smoother to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
When discussing your availability, be more explicit about why you cannot work at nights and during weekends, if relevant to the task’s request or your circumstances. Adding more specifics can enhance the completeness of your response.
task achievement
While your letter addresses the main points mentioned in the advertisement, consider adding more detail about your suitability for different tasks and how your skills specifically can benefit Mrs. Barrett. This will enhance your task achievement score.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is largely appropriate for a semi-formal letter to someone you don’t know personally. To improve, ensure your closing salutation matches the level of formality of your greeting, and consider using phrases that indicate a willingness to discuss the job further, which could make your letter seem more open and engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Domestic chores
  • Culinary skills
  • Horticulture
  • Cultural immersion
  • Work ethic
  • Flexible schedule
  • Time management
  • Prior commitments
  • Punctuality
  • Reliability
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