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The table below gives information on what people in five different countries chose to do with their discretionary income. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on what people in five different countries chose to do with their discretionary income. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
illustrate
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 the proportion of how people manage their disposable income
by
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in
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 three different ways in India, Finland, Vietnam, Pakistan and
Morocco
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the largest proportion of
selecting
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 in all five countries was associated with spending.
While
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 investing was the least popular choice for people in each country. Out of five countries, spending was obviously higher in
Morocco
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that
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 is half the percentage, and India, at 45%. The proportion of investing was
also
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 highest in
Morocco
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, at nearly 7%,
while
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 Finland could be seen was significantly higher in the category of saving, at 14.1%, than any of
other
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 countries. It can be seen that Pakistan had the lowest percentages of both spending and saving, at 24.6% and just 8.5% severally. Moving to the item of
investing
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, the lowest figure was allocated to Vietnam, at only 3.1% which is half as much as
Morocco
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words morocco with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discretionary income
  • expenditure
  • spending patterns
  • comparisons
  • outliers
  • cultural influence
  • economic conditions
  • leisure activities
  • trend analysis
  • cost of living
  • socioeconomic factors
  • proportion
  • priority
  • developed countries
  • employment rates
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