The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
In the graph seen, there
are
so Change the verb form
is
many
information which Correct quantifier usage
much
describe
the main Change the verb form
describes
activities
held by participants
in one of the social centers
in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020. These Change the spelling
centres
activities
passed through ups and downs in terms of the general participation by users
. Film
club
is the only activity
which can be considered as a consistent activity
throughout these two decades. Meanwhile, Table
tennis
faced a huge linear breakthrough in number
of its Change the article
a number
the number
participants
in 2010.
Generally speaking, the mentioned social center
contains different Change the spelling
centre
activities
from Film
club
, to martial arts, amateur dramatics, table
tennis
, to musical performances
. All of these activities
were be
done by Unnecessary verb
apply
participants
from year
2000 to 2005 except musical Change the article
the year
performances
. Musical performances
maybe was
not an option at that time. Verb problem
may
Film
club
as mentioned before is the most consistent activity
where number
of Change the article
a number
the number
users
in 20 years
was somehow the same which is approximately 65 users
with error
range of 5 Add an article
an error
users
plus or minus. Martial arts also
can be termed as "consistent" where number
of its Change the article
a number
the number
participants
number is
averaged between 32 to 40 Verb problem
apply
users
throughout these 20 years
.
Other activities
are not as consistent as martial arts and film
club
. Taking Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
for
example, the amateur dramatics. It's the only Add the comma(s)
, for
activity
which
its Change preposition
in which
number
of users
decreased in the two decades instead
of being increased. In year
2000 there Change the article
the year
was
like 25 Correct subject-verb agreement
were
users
of this
activity
meanwhile in 2020 there are
just like 7 Wrong verb form
were
users
. Other activities
like table
tennis
and musical performances
became more likeable throughout the years
. This
is shown
that in 15 Wrong verb form
shows
years
, number
of Correct article usage
the number
users
became 15 users
. On the other hand
, number
of Change the article
the number
users
of table
tennis
increased in
35 Change preposition
to
users
in these two decades from 15 user
only to 50.Change to a plural noun
users
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