The charts above show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the information shown.
The charts describe two main topics, the first is the number of
Japanese
tourists travelling outside their country between 1985 and 1995. The second topic is the percentage
of the
Correct article usage
apply
Japanese
travelers
from the Change the spelling
travellers
overall
tourists to Australia in the same period.
The first chart gives a general positive linear change in the number of Japanese
travelers
in the mentioned decade. Starting from Change the spelling
travellers
year
Change the article
the year
of
1985, there Change preposition
apply
was
almost 4.5 million people Change the verb form
were
travlled
outside Japan Correct your spelling
travelling
where
in 1995, the number became around 14.5 Correct word choice
whereas
millions
. Simply, every Change to singular
million
year
there is an increase in Japanese
traveler
by approximately 1 million Fix the agreement mistake
travelers
traveler
which is astonishing.
Moving to Australia, It's shown that before Change to a plural noun
travelers
year
1985, the Change the article
the year
percentage
of Japanese
visitors to Australia from the whole visitors
was almost 0%. But, Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
year
by year
, it's observed that the rate is increasing to a local maxima
in Correct the article-noun agreement
a local maximum
local maxima
year
Add an article
the year
a year
of
1988 Change preposition
apply
where
the Correct word choice
when
percentage
was around 4.7%. In 1989, the rate is
decreased by almost 0.5% from the previous Unnecessary verb
apply
year
. It's noted that after the mentioned decrease, the percentage
continued in increasing
in a linear form to 1995.Change preposition
to increase
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