The chart beow shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart beow shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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illustrate
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the data about consuming fast
foods'
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foods
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frequent
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in the USA in 2003, 2006 and 2013.  
Overall
, most of
citizens
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the citizens
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ate in fast
food
restaurants once a week
during
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3
years
, and every
day
's indicator
represent
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the denoted gavge in 10
years
at all. In 2003, the highest period of consuming fast
food
is
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once a week nearly 32
percent
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ot
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of
population
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the population
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,
however
, individuals that never or every
day
ingest it, showed approximately similar percentage with
1
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percent
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difference. (5% and 4%.) After 3
years
, devouring fast
food
once on week
uplifted
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increased
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by 3
percent
,
however
, every
day
consuming
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decreased by 2 %. Citizens who consumed once or twice a month
was
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5%
lesser
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less
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than 3
years
ago (30 and 25
percent
) In 2013, the highest percentage of visiting fast
food
restaurants
,
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was nearly
same
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the same
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as in 2006, and every
day
's
consuming
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consumption
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was similar
as
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to
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7
years
ago
at
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apply
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all
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apply
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, years, day, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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