The chart beow shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The given chart
illustrate
the data about consuming fast Change the verb form
illustrates
foods'
Change noun form
foods
frequent
in the USA in 2003, 2006 and 2013.
Change the word
frequently
Overall
, most of citizens
ate in fast Add an article
the citizens
food
restaurants once a week during
3 Change preposition
for
years
, and every day
's indicator represent
the denoted gavge in 10 Change the verb form
represents
years
at all.
In 2003, the highest period of consuming fast food
is
once a week nearly 32 Wrong verb form
was
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
ot
Correct your spelling
of
population
,Correct article usage
the population
however
, individuals that never or every day
ingest it, showed approximately similar percentage with 1
Correct article usage
a 1
percent
difference. (5% and 4%.)
After 3 Change the spelling
per cent
years
, devouring fast food
once on week uplifted
by 3 Verb problem
increased
percent
, however
, every day
consuming
decreased by 2 %. Citizens who consumed once or twice a month Replace the word
consumption
was
5% Correct subject-verb agreement
were
lesser
than 3 Correct word choice
less
years
ago (30 and 25 percent
)
In 2013, the highest percentage of visiting fast food
restaurants,
was nearly Remove the comma
apply
same
as in 2006, and every Correct article usage
the same
day
's consuming
was similar Replace the word
consumption
as
7 Change preposition
to
years
ago at
Change preposition
apply
all
.Correct determiner usage
apply
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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