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The Chart below shows the number of household in US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.  summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The Chart below shows the number of household in US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.  summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The Bar Chart illustrate the
number
 of households in
US
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the US
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 which
divided
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is divided
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to
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into
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 5 categories of their annual
income
 in 2007, 2011 and 2015. The categories
consists
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consist
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 of less than $25.000, $25.000 to $49.999, $50.000 to $74.999, $75.000 to $99.999 and more than $100.000.
Overall
, all groups have increased the
number
 of household populations except the
middle
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middle-income
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income
 groups ($50.000 to $74.999 and $75.000 to $99.999) which experienced stagnancy. Highest paid family which
earn
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earns
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 more than $100.000 per year,
have
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had
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 right under 30
millions household
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million households
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 in 2007 but slightly decreased to around 27
millions
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million
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 two years later.
However
, They rose significantly in 2015 to approximately 38
millions
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million
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 which
the
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is the
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 highest
number
 out of all categories. The
middle
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middle-income
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income
 groups have
not
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no
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 population growth. the $50.000 to $74.999 household only
have
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has
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 slightly over 20
millions
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million
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 and the other one just under 15
millions
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million
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 which is the lowest
number
 of the
populations
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population
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. In conclusion, the data show the lowest and the highest annual
income
 group have added populations meanwhile the other group
not
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does not
did not
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 have the same condition.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, income, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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