Children today spend more time watching television than they did in the past. Describe some of the advantages and disadvantages of television for children.

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. These

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our

children

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life

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. Watching

television

is one of the

things

Some

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people

this

is a positive idea,

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others disagree and think it is a waste of

time

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essay agrees

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watching

television

is useful.

this

essay will discuss both points of view. First of all, Watching

television

for children is useful, to explain that , the

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has

alot

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a lot

of different channels ,

such

as educational programs, sports and cartoons .

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to that,

television

is helpful for some kids, to illustrate that, the new version of

television

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become bigger.

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use mobile

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television

to study for exams.

On the other hand

television

can be harmful,

in other words

, if they stay

to watch

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for

long

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time

they could get

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eyes

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infection, as an

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for

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that

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, some people

uses

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eyeglasses because

thiar

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their

this

eyesight becomes weak from watching

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protection, Not only that,

television

waste

time

, as an

example

for that some kids could become distracted from their own life and stay focused on watching movies ,to give a clear

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, from my experience,my youngest brother is addicted to

television

so he always stay on watching and got distracted from hes school homeworks. In my opinion, after a detailed review of both points of view, I believe that

Television

is very helpful when you use it

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your free

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kind of

entertainment

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things

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since watching sports and playing video games is my habit.

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4Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

266 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

educational programs
diverse cultures
entertainment options
language skills
critical thinking
social awareness
shared experience
sedentary lifestyle
inappropriate content
academic performance
attention problems
social skills
commercial influence
addiction

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