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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages. (IELTS 9, AC)

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Some specialists believe that it is better for
children
 to start learning a foreign
language
 at primary school rather than secondary school. I personally believe that
although
 learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 at an early
age
 is difficult, the advantages of learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 at the primary level outweigh the drawbacks because a child's early
age
 is the best
age
 to learn a new
language
. When a child
start
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 learning a new
language
 at his primary level, he can easily learn
grammar
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the grammar
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 and vocabulary of that
lamguage
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language
. Learning a new
language
 from the
age
5
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to 10 is easy because a child's brain function is suitable for learning a new
language
 at
this
age
.
Moreover
, at
primary
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 level,
children
 have less study pressure,
therefore
, they can invest their time in learning a new
language
. It is
the
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best for
children
 to learn a new
language
 when they have a lot of spare time. In Japan,
for example
,
children
 start learning Italian and French as their second languages when they are
at
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 primary school.
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task achievement
While your introduction clearly states your position, it would benefit from being expanded slightly to provide a clearer roadmap of the essay's points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that the conclusion reinforces your main argument, summarizing the key points discussed.
task achievement
Your argument for young children's brains being more adept at learning new languages and having less study pressure at primary level is compelling and logically presented.
task achievement
The example of Japan is relevant and effectively illustrates your point about primary school language education.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Social inclusion
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  • Resource allocation
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  • Native language
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