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You recently attended a training workshop organized by a local company. However, there were several issues that made the workshop less effective than expected. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: Explain the problems you faced during the workshop Describe how these problems affected your experience Suggest what the company could do to improve future workshops

Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
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 to formally express concern with regard to the training workshop which was recently organised by your institute. I trust your esteemed organisation will address
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 matter promptly, and I am grateful for your consideration. To provide context, I attended the session on how to improve your workout routine on the 2nd of July 2025. During that, I faced Several problems, which included miscommunication,
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 inadequate parking facilities.
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, I had no other option
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 to park far away from the venue.
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,
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 matter is significant because it not only affected my experience but
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 had a major impact on my knowledge of the physical capacity of the human body.
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, owing to poor communication with the tutor,
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 was not able to understand concepts related to types of diets required during heavy workouts. In light of the above, I respectfully suggest improving the parking facilities
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 providing the required training to the tutor and checking their knowledge beforehand for future training programs. I sincerely appreciate your attention to
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 matter. Thank you for your time and support. Yours sincerely, Aayush Upadhyay

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content
Make each part of the letter show one main idea. Start with the problem, then say how it hit you, then give a fix.
style
Use short, clear lines. Limit long or hard words.
language
Fix small mistakes in writing, like I and i, and cap the right words. Use one space after a period.
structure
Put a new idea in a new paragraph. Use small linking words to join ideas.
tone
Polite tone and aim to fix the issue is clear.
content
The letter has three main parts: problem, effect, and fix.
presentation
Ending with thanks shows respect.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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