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You have been informed that one of your long-distance friends has fallen ill to a disease you have contracted before. Send them an e-mail, asking for an update on their situation and suggesting them some remedies.

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Dear Maryam, How is it going with you? Is your pain alleviated or not by taking medicine? I contracted the same ailment
last
 month and it was a really hard situation. I'm writing
this
 letter in order to give you some pieces of advice to go through
this
 difficult period. When I was diagnosed with
this
 kind of flu which is infectious and has been transmitted to humans by infected meat, I was confined in hospital for 4 days, I had a high temperature, an intense cough along a sore throat; if your fever doesn't decline, it will be better to arrange an appointment whit a consultant. It may be better to change your treatment procedure by getting some new tablets. Please pay attention to consuming a specific dose of vitamins and minerals during
this
 term as they assist you in building up strength; don't conduct daunting tasks in order to conserve some energy for your body in order to cope with
this
 disease. these days, you are facing
with
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difficulties, but you will get rid of
this
 situation so soon,
thus
 don't be anxious about it just get rest. I'm keenly looking forward to your response, please update me about your status as I'm so worried about you. Best wishes, Shaghayegh
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Your response is quite comprehensive, addressing your friend's condition and providing detailed advice. However, be mindful of grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas flow logically from one to the next. Additionally, be consistent with punctuation and capitalization, as well as the overall tone of the email.
task achievement
You did a good job in conveying your points through relevant examples. Paying extra attention to providing more specific details can make your advice even stronger.
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Your concern for your friend is evident and adds a personal touch to the email.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your email is logical with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
You provided useful and relevant suggestions, which adds value to your email.

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