The bar charts below shows the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged 12 to 19 by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014.

The bar charts below shows the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged 12 to 19 by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014.
The charts provide the prevalence of
obesity
between males and females aged 12 to 19 based on ethnicity in the United States between the years
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2004 and 2014. In general, it is obvious that in 2014, the
percentage
of people with
obesity
increased in all three ethnicities compared to 2004 and
non-
Hispanic
black
girls
and
Hispanic
boys each reached the highest
percentage
among their generation. In 2004 12
percent
of the adolescent
non-
Hispanic
boys were classified as overweight. The
percentage
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rose
raised
rises
to 17
percent
in 2014.
Whereas
, 11
percent
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of
the
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non_Hispanic black and 13
percent
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Hispanic
teenagers faced the same issue which
rised
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raised
rose
rise
to 20 and 27
percent
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repectively
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respectively
in 2014. Among
girls
,
non-
Hispanic
white adolescents had the lowest
percentage
of
obesity
in both years, 9 and 14
percent
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respectievly
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respectively
.
However
non-
Hispanic
black
girls
aged 12 to 19, had the highest
percentage
of overweight teenagers in both years which reached from 16
percent
in 2004 to 29
percent
in 2014.
Also
, 12
percent
of
Hispanic
girls
were classified as overweight in 2004 and the
percentage
went up to 17
percent
in 2014.
Overall
, more
Hispanic
boys suffered from
obesity
while
this
rate was higher among the
non-
Hispanic
black
girls
.
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