The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent  their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart compares families’ weekly
expenses
in a particular country in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
,
while
families spent most of their weekly income on food in 1968, leisure became the highest spending after five decades.
Additionally
, families used the least proportion of their income on fuel and power in both given years. In 1968, households spent a significant majority of their weekly salary on food, which accounted for 35%.
However
, it experienced a dramatic fall to just above 15% in 2018. The housing
and
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clothing and footwear
expenses
both stood at 10% in 1968. Five decades later,
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housing grew dramatically to just below one-fifth, for clothing and footwear, it decreased by 5%. Family spending on leisure doubled from just below 10% in 1968 to around 22% in 2018, exceeding their expense on food. Regarding the other categories, both family
expenses
on household
goods
, personal
goods
, and transport stood at around 8% and fuel and power accounted for approximately 6%.
Whereas
their spending on household
goods
remained the same, for personal
goods
and fuel and power, they decreased to the same level at just below 5% in 2018.
On the other hand
, transport
expenses
experienced a slight rise to around 14% in 2018.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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