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The bar chart shows the results of the survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London thought of the city

The bar chart shows the results of the survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London thought of the city
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The bar chart compares the outcomes of the survey conducted for three
years
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 to know the opinions about the
range
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 of
shops
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 , job opportunities , a mixture of
people
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 , museums and art galleries ,
nightlife
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 and
Transport
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 in London city .
Overall
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,
people
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 experienced a better life in the city in the first
year
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 and the results decreased over time with minor fluctuations in some categories. despite the wholesome decline , the
range
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 of
shops
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 remained moderately stable .
Nightlife
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 and
transport
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 witnessed significant changes over the period given.
Firstly
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 ,45% of
people
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 tended to like the
range
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 of
shops
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while
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 job opportunities and a mixture of
people
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 were lower in percentage by 6% and 8% respectively . Entertainment
such
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 as art galleries and
nightlife
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 results showed that only around 20 to 25% per cent of
people
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 were satisfied.
Transport
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 was
also
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 unfavourable by almost 25% per cent.
Additionally
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 , the
range
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 of
shops
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 slightly decreased to about 43% per cent
then
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 rose again to 44% at
last
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 . job opportunities dropped to 35% and remained stable in
years
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 2 and 3 . The mixture of
people
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 maintained stability in the first and second
years
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then
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 declined to 35% . Museums and art galleries kept growing throughout the
years
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 and reached a peak of 27% in the third
year
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 .
Moreover
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 ,
nightlife
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 fluctuated from 25% in the first
year
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then
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 fell to 20% and rose again to 23% .
Lastly
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,
transport
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also
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 experienced fluctuation and reached a peak of 25% in the
last
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year
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 .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, range, shops, people, nightlife, transport, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • results
  • conducted
  • three-year period
  • discover
  • thought
  • city
  • overall satisfaction
  • opinions
  • safety and security
  • transportation
  • perceptions
  • cleanliness
  • cultural and recreational activities
  • attitudes
  • cost of living
  • feedback
  • healthcare services
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