The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now
The floor plan illustrates the development of the public library now compared to 20 years ago. Over the twenty years, there have been replacements of
room
allocations with the removal of tables and chairs and the addition of new amenities.
While
the entrance remains, the tables and chairs which
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front of it have been removed, making the hallway vacant until the back of the library.
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the left
side
, the reading
room
has been changed into
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room
,
while
the adult fiction
books
section
has been relocated to the right
side
, making it the
section
for all reference
books
. Beside it, the
room
for CDs, videos, and computer games has been developed into a children’s
room
, consisting of children’s fiction
books
, two sofas, and space for storytelling events which
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expanded. On the right
side
, the enquiry desk has been relocated to the next
side
of it with an adjustment in size, making the way for a café to be developed. Next to it is a series of self-service machines alongside a new information desk and adult fiction
books
which was a
section
for adult non-fiction
books
20 years ago. Near to it is a lecture
room
which formerly was a children’s
books
section
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, side, books, section with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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