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The table below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. write at least 150 words.

The table below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. write at least 150 words.
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The tables depict data raking the
litres
 per person per year of 10 nations for
both
fruit
juice
 and
beer
consumption
.
Overall
, the highest
consumption
 of
beer
 and
fruit
juice
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 in
Ireland
 and Canada, respectively. Meanwhile, these two countries get the first ranking in one category, they do not exist in another category.
In contrast
, Germany, Austria , Australia, the UK, the US and
Netherlands
Correct article usage
the Netherlands
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 exist in
both
 tables. Notably,
Correct article usage
the Netherland
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Netherland
Fix the agreement mistake
Netherlands
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 gets 9th in
both
 beverages. The countries ranking second and third in
beer
consumption
, are Germany and Austria, accounting for 119 and 106
litres
 per person per year,
also
 exist in
Fruit
juice
consumption
 ranked third and fourth, at 38.6 and 37.3
litres
. The Netherlands is the only nation which has the same ranking at 9th place in
both
category
Change to a plural noun
categories
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. The most
consumption
 of
beer
 in
Ireland
 figure at 155
litres
,
while
 the most
consumption
 of
fruit
juice
, Canada
consume
Correct subject-verb agreement
consumes
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 102.4
litres
 less than
Ireland
's
consumption
 in
beer
.
Nevertheless
, neither
Ireland
 nor Canada
consumption
amout
Correct your spelling
amount
exist
Change the verb form
exists
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 in another type of beverage.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words litres, both, fruit, juice, beer, consumption, ireland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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