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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date open, km of routes, and passagers numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date open, km of routes, and passagers numbers per year in millions.
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The table illustrates the underground railway operation in the six biggest cities, including the
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 date,
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kilometers
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 of route, and
passengers
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 per year.
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, it can be seen that the oldest railway systems are the longest ones,
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 with the youngest routes that present the smaller routes. London opened first (1863) and is nearly twice as expansive (394
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) as the second largest subway, in Paris, which opened in 1900 and is 199
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 long.
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, Paris now has more
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 compared to London (1,191,000,000 to 775,000,000). 3. Tokyo was the next oldest, having been constructed in 1927 with routes measuring a total of 155
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 and being made use of by 1,928,000,000
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 annually. The more modern subways are Washington, D.C. (1976), Kyoto (1981), and Los Angeles (2001). Washington is the largest of the 3 at 126
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 with 144,000,000 yearly
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. 3. Kyoto is by far the smallest (11
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) and serves relatively few individuals (45 million).
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, the Los Angeles subway is 18
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 in cumulative length, and only 50,000,000 people travel on it each year.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometers, passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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