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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?n?

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In
this
 contemporary era, technology is booming day by day which is helping human
life
 in a numerous way. Ít is predicting that in
upcoming
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 time all vehicles will be driven automatically which means transport vehicles
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 only commuters. In my contend the cons of
this
 is increased
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 its pros.
To begin
 with, there are various drawbacks
of
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driveless
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driverless
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 automobiles.
The first
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 and foremost, the transportation industry gives a wide range of job opportunities to people. Many folks work in
bus
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, truck and car industry to earn their daily bread and butter and live their
life
,
therefore
this
 development will
effect
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 their
life
 significantly. A survey conducted by Time News of India
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indicated
10
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% of
Delhi
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 population depends on travel companies for their daily expenditure.
Additionally
, another major negative effect of automatic vehicles is unexpected incidents. In unexpected situations
human
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humans
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 can perform more actively and more wisely,
hence
 they can control the situation better than
artifical intellegence
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artificial intelligence
.
For instance
, a recent article written by the University of Toronto
they
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explained if technology
will
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took over
the
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transportation the accident rate
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 tremendously. In conclusion, there is no doubt that robotic systems are making
the
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human
life
 more easy and effective.
However
, if some sectors are only under
controlled
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 by
human
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humans
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 that will make human
life
 more safe.
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Ensure that the introduction clearly states your opinion and outlines the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
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Strengthen your arguments by providing more specific and concrete examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
A good attempt to discuss both sides of the argument and provide a clear stance.
coherence cohesion
You have included a conclusion that summarizes your key points and restates your stance.

Word Count

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