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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows a comparison of
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the percentage
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percentage
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percentages
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for
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of
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 average
families
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families'
family's
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income
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 through
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week
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the week
a week
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 in one country from 1968 to 2018
overall
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,
it is clear that
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,
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 Families in the the two years spent equal money
in
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on
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householld
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household
goods
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.
However
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, the payment for clothing
deacresed
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decreased
 by twofold in 2018. In 1968, Food was very higher proportion
from
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to
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 other Spending in the
week
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.
while
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,
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apply
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 Housing
income
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 was 10%
through
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throughout
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the
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week
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 . Fuel and power and clothing and
footware
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footwear
 were approximately 6% and 5% respectively. Household
goods
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, personal
goods
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 and transport were
same
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the same
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 percentage almost 8%. The weekly
income
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 for Leisure was 90%
by
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of
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 families in that period. After 50 years the weekly spending for
population
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the population
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 was
dafferent
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different
. In 2018,
Citizins
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citizens
 spent their money for food almost 17%. the
income
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 level of housing and clothing and footwear was 19% and 10% respectively. whilst the
familites
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families
income
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 for fuel and power and
personl
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personal
goods
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 was equal about 4%. The payment through
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week
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the week
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 was
same
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the same
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 value
with
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as
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 past time. Transport
in
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apply
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this
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 year increased
lightly
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slightly
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 to 14%.whilst Leisure jumped significantly to 22% from
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the
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average weekly
income
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, week, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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