The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows a comparison of
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the percentage
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percentage
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percentages
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for
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of
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average
families
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families'
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income
through
week
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the week
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in one country from 1968 to 2018
overall
,
it is clear that
,
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Families in the the two years spent equal money
in
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householld
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household
goods
.
However
, the payment for clothing
deacresed
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decreased
by twofold in 2018. In 1968, Food was very higher proportion
from
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other Spending in the
week
.
while
,
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Housing
income
was 10%
through
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the
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week
. Fuel and power and clothing and
footware
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footwear
were approximately 6% and 5% respectively. Household
goods
, personal
goods
and transport were
same
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percentage almost 8%. The weekly
income
for Leisure was 90%
by
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families in that period. After 50 years the weekly spending for
population
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the population
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was
dafferent
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different
. In 2018,
Citizins
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citizens
spent their money for food almost 17%. the
income
level of housing and clothing and footwear was 19% and 10% respectively. whilst the
familites
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families
income
for fuel and power and
personl
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personal
goods
was equal about 4%. The payment through
week
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the week
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was
same
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the same
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value
with
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past time. Transport
in
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this
year increased
lightly
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slightly
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to 14%.whilst Leisure jumped significantly to 22% from
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the
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average weekly
income
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, week, goods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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