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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.
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The table shows the
length
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 of
daylight
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 and
temperature
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 of two different countries during the same period of weekend in December 2018.
Overall
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,
London
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 and
Sydney
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 have opposite
season
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seasons
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 during the same weekend in December 2018.
London
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 experienced winter,
whereas
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Sydney
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encounter
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encountered
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 summer. The
temperature
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 and
length
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 of
daylight
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 in the two cities
shows
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are
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 contrastly different.
London
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 with its cold
temperature
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 shows fluctuation
on
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in
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both
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 maximum and minimum
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temperature
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temperatures
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 with the highest
at
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on
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 Saturday and Friday at the lowest.
Then
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 differences can be seen clearly in
Sydney
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that
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which
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encounter
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encounters
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a gradually
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gradually
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gradual
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 rise in its
temperature
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 which is Sunday at 31
degree
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degrees
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 and 19
degree
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degrees
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 respectively.
In addition
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, the
length
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 of the
daylight
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also
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face
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faces
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 the same trend in
both
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 cities.
Sydney
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 experienced much longer
daylight
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contrastly
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contrast
 to
London
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. Sun in
the
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apply
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sydney
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Sydney
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rise
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rises
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 earlier than in
London
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, which is 5 am and 8 am respectively.
On the other hand
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, the sun set earlier in
London
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 which is around five hours difference.
However
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,
both
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 countries encounter
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a gradually
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gradually
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gradual
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 rise in sunrise and sunset
time
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times
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in
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at
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 the weekend. With the
comparation
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comparison
 of these two cities,
i
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I
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 conclude that
both
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 of them have more differences rather than similarities
especially
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, especially
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 in terms of
temperature
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 and
length
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 of
daylight
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words length, daylight, temperature, london, sydney, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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