The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.
The table shows the
length
of
daylight
and
temperature
of two different countries during the same period of weekend in December 2018.
Overall
,
London
and
Sydney
have opposite
season
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seasons
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during the same weekend in December 2018.
London
experienced winter,
whereas
Sydney
encounter
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summer. The
temperature
and
length
of
daylight
in the two cities
shows
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are
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contrastly different.
London
with its cold
temperature
shows fluctuation
on
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both
maximum and minimum
temperature
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temperatures
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with the highest
at
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on
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Saturday and Friday at the lowest.
Then
differences can be seen clearly in
Sydney
that
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encounter
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encounters
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a gradually
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gradually
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rise in its
temperature
which is Sunday at 31
degree
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degrees
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and 19
degree
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degrees
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respectively.
In addition
, the
length
of the
daylight
also
face
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the same trend in
both
cities.
Sydney
experienced much longer
daylight
contrastly
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contrast
to
London
. Sun in
the
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apply
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sydney
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Sydney
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rise
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rises
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earlier than in
London
, which is 5 am and 8 am respectively.
On the other hand
, the sun set earlier in
London
which is around five hours difference.
However
,
both
countries encounter
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a gradually
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gradually
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gradual
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rise in sunrise and sunset
time
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times
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in
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at
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the weekend. With the
comparation
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comparison
of these two cities,
i
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I
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conclude that
both
of them have more differences rather than similarities
especially
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, especially
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in terms of
temperature
and
length
of
daylight
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words length, daylight, temperature, london, sydney, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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