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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the figure of
families
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 by their yearly
earning
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earnings
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 in 2007, 2011 and 2015 in the United States of America.
Overall
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,
households
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 in all income categories, except from
$
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the $
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50,000-$74,999 category, fluctuated throughout the given period.
Began
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Beginning
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 at 25
million
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 in 2007,
families
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 with income less than $25,000 increased to around $28
million
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 in 2011 and dropped to approximately 27
million
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 in 2015.
Similarly
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,
households
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with
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apply
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earning between $25.0000-$49.000 grew to 30
million
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 in 2011 from around 26
million
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 in 2007, followed by a dip to approximately 28
million
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 in 2015.
While
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households
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 with $50,000-$74,999 in
earning
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earnings
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 plateaued at just above 20
million
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 from 2007 to 2015,
the
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apply
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families
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 from $75,000-$99,999 and above $100,000 were not. Stood just below 15
million
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,
households
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 with income $75,000-$99,999 dipped to around 14
million
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 in 2011 but climbed to 15
million
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 in 2015.
Likewise
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,
families
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 earning above $100,000 decreased in 2011
at
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to
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 around 28
million
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 from almost 30
million
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 in 2007.
However
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, the number skyrocketed to around 33
million
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 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, households, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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