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The table gives us information about the number of people working as researchers in technology per million people in five countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table gives us information about the number of people working as researchers in technology per million people in five countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates how many people
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 as
researchers
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 in technology per million people in Turkey,
Poland
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,
Mexico
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,
Moldova
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 and
Togo
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 between 2003 to 2007.
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,
Poland
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 has shown the biggest
numbers
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while
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 the least amount was seen in
Togo
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. The biggest
rose
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 was in Turkey
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 some of the countries are gradually increasing
for example
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Mexico
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 and
Moldova
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,
also
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Togo
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 holding the same number.
Poland
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 had progressively declined over
this
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 period of time from 285 in 2003 to 226 in 2007,
although
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Poland
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 has remained
the
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 top
in
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of
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 the list by
numbers
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.
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While
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apply
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Togo
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 has the
least
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lowest
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numbers
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number
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 of
researchers
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 gradually increasing and decreasing over
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 timeline,
for
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instance
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this
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 country declined in 2004 and 2006 with 17
researchers
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 starting from 18 in 2003 and it climbed to 23 scientists in 2005 and went down modestly again to 18 in 2007.
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, Turkey has seen the biggest growth, it almost doubled from 47 scientists in 2003 to 106 in 2007.
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,
Moldova
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 and
Mexico
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has
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 seen a slight soar.
Mexico
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 started from 147
researchers
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 in 2003 and it climbed to 242 in 2005 being in
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 year the top of the list, and in 2007 the
numbers
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 go down to 183.
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,
Moldova
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 plunged steadily from 103 in 2003 to 89 in 2005, after there was a
noticeably
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 rise to 114 in 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words researchers, poland, mexico, moldova, togo, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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