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The table gives us information about the number of people working as researchers in technology per million people in five countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table gives us information about the number of people working as researchers in technology per million people in five countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates how many people
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are involved
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 as
researchers
 in technology per million people in Turkey,
Poland
,
Mexico
,
Moldova
 and
Togo
 between 2003 to 2007.
Overall
,
Poland
 has shown the biggest
numbers
while
 the least amount was seen in
Togo
. The biggest
rose
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rise
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 was in Turkey
while
 some of the countries are gradually increasing
for example
Mexico
 and
Moldova
,
also
Togo
 holding the same number.
Poland
 had progressively declined over
this
 period of time from 285 in 2003 to 226 in 2007,
although
Poland
 has remained
the
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at the
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 top
in
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of
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 the list by
numbers
.
While
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Togo
 has the
least
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lowest
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numbers
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number
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 of
researchers
 gradually increasing and decreasing over
this
 timeline,
for
instance
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instance,
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this
 country declined in 2004 and 2006 with 17
researchers
 starting from 18 in 2003 and it climbed to 23 scientists in 2005 and went down modestly again to 18 in 2007.
Therefore
, Turkey has seen the biggest growth, it almost doubled from 47 scientists in 2003 to 106 in 2007.
Similarly
,
Moldova
 and
Mexico
has
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 seen a slight soar.
Mexico
 started from 147
researchers
 in 2003 and it climbed to 242 in 2005 being in
this
 year the top of the list, and in 2007 the
numbers
 go down to 183.
Furthermore
,
Moldova
 plunged steadily from 103 in 2003 to 89 in 2005, after there was a
noticeably
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 rise to 114 in 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words researchers, poland, mexico, moldova, togo, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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