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One of the major environmental issues today is the littering of public spaces with packaging materials such as plastic wrappers and cardboard boxes. What are the reasons for this? What are some effective ways to reduce litter from packaging materials? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, the littering of public spaces with packaging
materials
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 like plastic wrappers and cardboard boxes is one of the most common
issue
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. In fact, governments should find a solution
for
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this
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 global challenge.
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, there are a lot of reasons
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 to
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 problem. First of all, lack of awareness is a crucial factor because many people do not understand the risks of
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 problem.
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, a
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 proportion of people these days eat packaged food, which increases utilizing
materials
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 like plastic and others. A study published by some students at King Saud University concluded that 85% of individuals prefer to have packaged food.
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, the environment will be polluted by these
materials
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.
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, too many methods could be followed to decrease the usage of packaged
materials
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.
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, it is significant for the government to put a
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using limit
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 for these kinds of
materials
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, if a person
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 over
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 limit, he should pay a small amount of money as a fine.
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, increasing the prices of some products will be helpful, so
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 difficulty will
be vanished
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.
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, in the duration between 1997 and 1999, many people used to purchase unrecycled
materials
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 In Oman, the country noticed that the pollution rate increased rapidly. The king decided to increase the prices of unrecycled material
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 40%. In conclusion, pollution is one of the main difficulties today. It can be said that
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 issue is widespread
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 the high
using
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 of
materials
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such
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 as plastic. Currently, countries are
plying
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playing
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 a critical
rule
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role
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 to preserve the environment.

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task achievement
You've addressed the task and given clear ideas. However, providing more specific and varied examples would strengthen your argument. For example, discussing the impact of educational programs or recycling initiatives could add depth to your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Some transitions between ideas could be smoother. Consider using cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore,' 'Additionally,' 'In contrast,' etc., to link your points more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences are a bit awkward or unclear. For instance, 'In fact, governments should find a solution for this global challenge,' might read better as, 'In fact, it's crucial for governments to find solutions to this global challenge.' Focus on refining sentence structure for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion clearly outline the issue and summarize your points, which provides a sense of completeness to your essay.
task achievement
You've adequately covered both reasons for the problem and potential solutions, which shows a good understanding of the task requirements.

Your opinion

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