The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the moneys came from and the charts show how it is distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the moneys came from and the charts show how it is distributed.
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The charts illustrate several resources of
police
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the police
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budget
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and how it was budgeted
to
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for
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particular things in Britain's area between 2017 and 2018. As we can see data in the table, in 2017, the highest money came from the national government, amounting to 175.5m.
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number slightly increased to 177.8m by 2018 and remained
as
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the dominant
budget
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source.
Following
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this
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, in 2017, local taxes produced 91.2m and it gradually rose to 102.3m by 2018. The least
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produced by other resources,
such
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as grants, showing only 38m. It
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marginally rose to 38.5m by 2028, but it stayed the lowest
budget
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of the
year
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. In total,
police
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the police
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budget
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was 304.7m in 2017 and
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increased to 316.6m by the next
year
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. Moving to
pie
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the pie
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charts, in 2017, the money
dominantly
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was dominantly
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spent
for
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on
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officers and staff salaries, amounting to 75% of
total
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the total
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share.
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, it remarkably decreased to 69% by 2018. Facilities expenditure,
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as building and transport, following in the next position,
contibuted
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contributed
to 17% of total spending in 2017. It remained unchanged by the next
year
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. Technology showed the lowest contribution with only 8% of
total
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the total
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share in 2017,
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, it significantly increased to 14% by 2018, staying as the bottom contributor of the
year
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, m, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • expenditure categories
  • fiscal year
  • operational efficiency
  • resource allocation
  • personnel management
  • National Government
  • Local Taxes
  • Miscellaneous revenues
  • Salaries
  • Technology
  • Buildings and Transport
  • budget distribution
  • financial trends
  • allocation shifts
  • budget increments
  • expenditure patterns
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