The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data. Write at least 150 words.

The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data. Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts show the differences in the expenditure habits of individuals from 1971 to 2001 in the UK.
Overall
, the trend shows a change in some categories
such
as Cars which increased and Food was the opposite. In 1971, Food was standing there at 44% in all categories which was the highest percentage.
Then
, followed by cars with one and a half per cent difference was 22%
while
petrol and furniture were only 10%.
In Addition
, restaurants, books, furniture, and computers only took place in below 10% where computers becoming the lowest stuff that people buy that was 2%.
In Contrast
, in 2001, the number of cars and restaurants expenditure rose
almost
Change preposition
by almost
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50%
by
Change preposition
apply
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43% and 14% each.
Furthermore
, computers became
item
Add an article
an item
show examples
that
gradual increase
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gradually increased
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to 12%. Meanwhile, some items
were decrease
Change the verb form
were decreased
show examples
such
as petrol, furniture, and books by less than 5%.
However
, the percentage of Food consumption sharply
fall
Wrong verb form
fell
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to 14
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
was the biggest
dropped
Replace the word
drop
show examples
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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