The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data. Write at least 150 words.

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The pie charts show the differences in the expenditure habits of individuals from 1971 to 2001 in the UK.

Overall

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, the trend shows a change in some categories

such

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as Cars which increased and Food was the opposite. In 1971, Food was standing there at 44% in all categories which was the highest percentage.

Then

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, followed by cars with one and a half per cent difference was 22%

while

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petrol and furniture were only 10%.

In Addition

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, restaurants, books, furniture, and computers only took place in below 10% where computers becoming the lowest stuff that people buy that was 2%.

In Contrast

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, in 2001, the number of cars and restaurants expenditure rose

almost

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by almost

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50%

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apply

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43% and 14% each.

Furthermore

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, computers became

item

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that

gradual increase

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to 12%. Meanwhile, some items

were decrease

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were decreased

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such

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as petrol, furniture, and books by less than 5%.

However

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, the percentage of Food consumption sharply

fall

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fell

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to 14

that

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which

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was the biggest

dropped

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drop

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

158 words

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