The chart gives information about the average annual water consumption in kilolitre per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for last year, with the pie chart that shows the distribution of Australian water consumption by the year 2014.

The chart gives information about the average annual water consumption in kilolitre per property in Australian cities, namely Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canberra for last year, with the pie chart that shows the distribution of Australian water consumption by the year 2014.
The bar graphs illustrate the average yearly
water
usage in different
cities
(Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne, and Canberra) in Australia
last
year. The pie chart displays the percentage of sectors using
water
in 2014.
Overall
, the six
cities
in Australia had
water
consumption between 150 and 300
kilolitres
per property in 2014,
while
the biggest distributor was agriculture.
Firstly
, the least
water
user
cities
were Canberra and Melbourne with just under 150
kilolitres
and just over 150
kilolitres
per property respectively. The highest amount of
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water
was in Perth
that
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doubled
the
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last
two
cities
. Brisbane had 250
kilolitres
of
water
consumption,
while
Sydney had 200
kilolitre
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kilolitres
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per property.
Moreover
, Adelaide was between these
cities
with around 225
kilolitres
of
water
usage.
On the other hand
, agriculture was the main sector in consumption distribution with 67%,
while
the nearest second sector was households with only 2%.
Water
supply and electricity had the same amount with 7% of distribution,
while
other industries and manufacturing had 4% each.
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