Some government say how many children a family can have in their country. they may control the number of children someone has through taxes it is sometimes necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way. do you agree or disagree?
There is no denying that some authorities in many countries force
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a parent
the parent
parent
to have two children or one child and to keep Fix the agreement mistake
parents
this
in control government apply
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applies
excis
to stick Correct your spelling
excise
on
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to
specific
number of Change the article
a specific
the specific
population
. I totally agree with Correct article usage
the population
this
idea and I am going to illustrate the causes to support my opinion.
On one
hand , Correct article usage
the one
control
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controlling
popultaion
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population
number
can bring many benefits like Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
save
source of Replace the word
saving
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the nation
nation
income from being Change noun form
nation's
drain
by many consumers Wrong verb form
drained
also
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and also
offer
good education for Wrong verb form
offering
inhabitiants
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inhabitants
beside
that people will get maximum care from Change preposition
besides
heath
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health
servises
that government bring ,Correct your spelling
services
however
very
fast growing Correct article usage
a very
population
is going to make huge
load on nations services which going to lead to collapse for these kinds of Add an article
the huge
sevices
. Correct your spelling
services
For instance
, China years ago made rule
that each family Add an article
a rule
the rule
have
more than one baby Wrong verb form
having
is
going to cut off Unnecessary verb
apply
may
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many
goverment suppies
and advantages plus pay extra tax as Correct your spelling
government supplies
result
of Add an article
a result
this
action population
figure went down and elevate quality Change preposition
of nation
nation
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national
servises
.
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services
On the other hand
, ignoring this
kind of issue can impact on enviroment's
community negativelyCorrect your spelling
environment's
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,
for example
, air ,land, sound and water polloution
as Correct your spelling
pollution
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a consequnce
consequnce
of uncontrol of Correct your spelling
consequence
consequences
incline
number of people like some counties in Correct article usage
the incline
africa
with high Change the capitalization
Africa
population
indicate air pollution because of land transportion
which effect on civilian health cause them lung diseases and various of Correct your spelling
transportation
illnes
.
In conclusion , many advantages come with Correct your spelling
illness
reduce
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reducing
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the nation
nation
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nation's
population
by apply
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applying
tax
to improve Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
qulity
services and make the Correct your spelling
quality
enviroment healther
than Correct your spelling
environment healthier
befor
.Correct your spelling
before
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