Many, small local shops are closing as they are unable to compete with large supermarkets in the area. How does thsi affect local communities? How could this situation be improved?
Many local stores are forced to
be closed
because they cannot compete with the supermarkets.Wrong verb form
close
As a result
, lack of product diversity in addition
financial
capacity, but Change preposition
to financial
this
can be tackled by supporting
from Replace the word
support
government
and Correct article usage
the government
population
Correct article usage
the population
in addition
learn
new skills.
Wrong verb form
to learning
Firstly
, several of shops
suffer from poor product selection.Correct article usage
the shops
In other words
, lacking of
product choices leads people who want outdoor products Remove the preposition
apply
are
driven to Change the verb form
to be
the
large supermarkets. Correct article usage
apply
As a consequence
, there is no doubt that this
issues
will lead to the closure of local Fix the agreement mistake
issue
shops
.Secondly
, financial capacity. Due to
the weak financial capacity of small businesses
, they are threatened with extinction, especially in competition with large businesses
, Moreover
small shop workers will lose their jobs and suffer from issues Add a comma
Moreover,
such
as poverty, And
Correct your spelling
and which
then
it might lead to bigger problems, for instance
, homelessness.
One effective solution to deal with this
issue is that
Correct word choice
apply
government
and population
support
. That is
to say, the government
and the population
should support
and help small businesses
to develop furtherFor example, the government
should cooperate with small businesses
in several aspects, such
as reducing taxes, which would these businesses
, grow and succeed in the future. As for the support
of the population
, it will be in terms of appreciation and moral support
. Showing appreciation to the owners of small shops
when visiting their shops
or interacting with them encourages them to continue.
In conclusion,,
when small Change the punctuation
apply
businesses
or shops
close, this
damage will also
affect society in many ways. nevertheless
, government
and population
support
has an effective impact on solving this
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