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In some countries police officers do not carry guns. How does this affect the manner they implement law and order? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a gun. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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In some nations,
officers
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 of the
law
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 do not have
weapons
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 with them which has many crucial impacts on their way of applying the
law
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. In
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 essay, I will explain the benefits and drawbacks of
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 action.
To begin
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 with,
police
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officers
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 who do not carry
guns
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 show that in the country they live in the level of security is high.
Additionally
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,
people
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 who live there
also
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 cooperate with the
police
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 which makes it easy work for
officers
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 to implement
law
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 and order.
For example
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: in Sweden
officers
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 of the
law
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 do not have
weapons
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 with them because
people
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 do not break the
law
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 and have high make work easy for
police
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.
This
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 level of safety makes the government think their policies do not need
guns
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 for applying for orders and it
people
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 will have a better life if there is not any weapon carrying there.
On the other hand
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, carrying
weapons
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 for
officers
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 is crucial because of the countries they live in.
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: in my country
people
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 break the
law
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 and do not care about it mostly gangsters carry
guns
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 with them and
police
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 must have
weapons
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 to defend and apply orders.
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, in some nations carrying
guns
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 is pivotal not only for the implementation of the
law
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 but
also
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 the for safety of the
police
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. In conclusion, most
people
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 believe that
police
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 should carry
guns
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 with them to support them in bad situations and
also
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 to implement the
law
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 but some societies which have better
people
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 and do not break the order of their governments do not see any reason for a carry of
guns
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.
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure, but it would benefit from more cohesive devices or transition words to ensure a smoother flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
While the introduction and conclusion are present and adequate, placing stronger emphasis on summarizing the key points discussed can draw a more persuasive conclusion.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt and discusses both advantages and disadvantages, which shows a balanced approach.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and serve their purpose well in providing a framework for the essay.
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