Government investment in the visual arts, the kind you commonly see in art galleries, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Investments from the

government

in visual arts are a waste of money,

instead

, the

government

should direct

this

monetary aid to public services.

This

essay completely agrees with the statement because

art

centres do not require any

additonal

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additional

financial backing and other sectors require

this

more.

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gallery's survival does not depend on the

government

's capital assistance. They can be self-reliant

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if they manage their events well. Typically, the events hosted by them lack good awareness, which results in low public exposure. If they are managed by seasoned professionals, cash from the ticket bookings only would overshoot the breakeven point.

Therefore

, they do not have to rely on the

government

for bearing

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the costs.

For example

, Nandan's, a cultural club of Kolkata, annual

art

exhibition is so famous, that it recovers their entire year's operational cost within the first day.

As a result

, they never had to request any investment from the state's finance minister.

Moreover

,

this

investment can be better utilized by other important sectors like healthcare, that are always in need

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capital to match the ever-changing

standarcs

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standards

of

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modern medical facilities. If the public hospitals and nursing homes get

this

additional money, they can hire more staff and improve their medical instruments, which in turn would benefit

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society and raise its health

standard

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standards

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.

For instance

,

Delhi

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the Delhi

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government

's budget allocation of an additional INR 1000 crore over the previous year in the state's medicine department has seen an improvement in the local health

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ability to provide a

world class

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service to its patients. In conclusion,

although

governments investing in

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art

galleries

are

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quite common, I believe it is a poor use of financial resources because these cultural centres can be self-reliant if they are well-managed, and other state departments like healthcare require

this

more to meet the changing medicine standards.