The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
This
line graph data provides information about the mean of how much each person from
United
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Kingdom,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal released Carbon Dioxide
in
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from
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1967 to 2007. United Kingdom ranked
the
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first
in 1967 with less than 11 metric
tons
of CO2 emissions. From 1967 to 1977 it
drop
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dropped
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only a tiny bit.
Then
from 1977, it started to slowly
decreasing
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decrease
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till 2007
where
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when
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it reached less than 9 metric
tons
and still ranked as the
first
position of the highest country that emitted CO2. In 1967,
Sweden
showed a sharp increase from around 7 metric
tons
to a little bit over 10 metric
tons
in 1977. From there, they fell by approximately 3 metric
tons
in 1987. Since
then
, the trend started to decrease gradually till it reached around 5 metric
tons
in 2007. That’s when
Sweden
and Portugal
meet
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met
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and ranked as the
last
place
. Over the 20
years
, Portugal,
who’s
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who is
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ranked at the
last
place
,
have
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a steady climb from over 1 metric
tons
in 1967 to a little over 3 metric
tons
. For the next 10
years
, it rises even quicker where
it
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reaches
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reaching
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approximately 5 metric
tons
. As for the
last
10
years
, it
increases
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has increased
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slightly. As for Italy, it rises rapidly for the
first
10
years
from around 1 metric ton to a little over 6. The next 20
years
, it keeps growing almost stable till it reaches less than 8 metric
tons
. As for the
last
10
years
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years,
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it remains stable.
United
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The United
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Kingdom remains the
first
place
from the beginning to the end,
while
Portugal remains the
last
place
from the entire graph. In 2007 Portugal
meets
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met
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Sweden
where both of the countries ranked 
as
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last
 
place
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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