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The plans below show a school library five years ago and the same library now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The diagrams provide information about how a school library has changed after renovation. In general,
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 the layout of the library has remained largely unchanged, the modifications allow it to accommodate more users for self-study and meetings. The library is accessible from the old entrance in the south, which allows users to reach a row of rooms to their left as they walk in. To the south of the book information counter and meeting room is a new printer for convenient use,
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 the classroom at the northern end has transformed into an audio room. We have expanded the centrally located study zone by adding two more tables, even though it previously had a four-table configuration. We have surrounded
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 area with bookshelves to the north and south
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 and included a dedicated computer books section to the east – features of the original layout.
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, we have repurposed the office in the south-eastern corner into a conference room.
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task achievement
While the essay addresses the task and includes relevant information, consider expanding the introduction and adding a concluding sentence. This will make the essay feel more complete.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph flows logically to the next. A more explicit connection between sections will enhance the overall readability.
task achievement
The essay covers all required aspects of the diagrams, providing a detailed summary of the main changes and features.
task achievement
The essay makes good use of comparative language to describe the changes between the two time periods.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure of the essay is logical, starting with general information and progressing to specific details.

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